Desi Like Cam Part 4

I thanked him for his suggestions and made the font change. I didn't even mind the implied criticism.I posted the story, it was a little out of place because the site specializes in erotica, but they allowed about anything legal to be posted.It was up for less than eight hours and I started getting emails. Most were complimentary but several with some sincere criticism. I went back and did a thorough spell and punctuation check, and fixed some run on sentences, also paragraphs were too long. One person pointed out that I was being unrealistic on how long I was having my character hit a golf ball, the story was a fantasy but hey he was right about it being unrealistic, and he had brought it up politely so no reason not to make a change. After making those corrections I reposted the story awaiting further comments and hoping for a few compliments.There were some attaboys and requests to keep writing, but another reader pointed out that my story would go better if it was a girl. The entire world has become corrupted, every race and individual twisted into a sexual parody of what they once were, if they have not become completely demonic in nature.There was hope for this world once. A bright shining champion from another world, that step by step gained power and allies, all so that the ruler of the demons could be defeated, allowing peace and purity to flourish in the land once again. Now the champion did gain power and allies enough to overthrow the previous ruler, but by that time the transformations as well as the nature of the world had made the champion even more corrupted than the ruler of the demons.So an entire world falls to depravity. Not as uncommon as you may think in the infinite possibilities that exist in the multiverse, and often that is the end of it. However because the fallen champion was from another world, this newly corrupted ruler knew there were other worlds out there. That meant that there were new cunts for his demons to spear, new.
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